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Thank you all for your insightful comments. I think all of you are correct; I wanted this to be a story about someone taking over a silo and the struggle of the commander to take it back. But then I thought I needed an extra twist to make it more interesting. But it seems I took a route that is very, very deficient. As you all pointed out, there seems to be a disconnect between the storyline of the struggle for the silo and the spy identity. I can't take the easy way out. So I'll need to reconsider how to find a hook that gives it a unique twist while still being connected to the main story line.
Again, thank you very much for your comments, I'll come back when I have a better logline to offer.
I don't see what the dramatic dilemma is here.
A true dilemma is one where a character must choose between 2 courses of action, both of which are equally desirable or equally undesirable. ?Emphasis on equally: ?she's damned if she she does; she's damned if she doesn't. If the choices aren't weighted equally, then it's not a true dramatic dilemma.
I don't see how having to overcome the war hero puts her in jeopardy of being revealed as a spy. ?Nor do I see how it conflicts with her spy mission. ?Surely, it is in the best interest of the country she spies for to defuse any situation that would trigger a nuclear war. ?She's been planted as a spy to collect technical intelligence, ?not precipitate a nuclear war. ?Right?
Agreed with Dkpough1 and DPG.
What is the story here? Is it about the spy trying to hide her true identity? Or her trying to take back control of the silo? Or the war hero trying to start WW3?