5 reviews
This is a great start, and it does pique interest. If fleshed out properly this could make for a very great screenplay.
"he attempts to take matters into his own hands"
I feel this is too vague as well......what "MUST" he do?
"taken hostage?"
Again, what does this mean.....physical, mental...psychological?
Feuding parents has been done before, and very well (Kramer v Kramer for one), I tend to agree with DPG the kidnapping parents adds a hook of interest. I suggest re-thinking this concept with the idea that the mother taking the father is the inciting incident. I'd also raise the stakes and make it more than one child.
For example:
After being taken hostage by his ex-wife a father who lost custody must break free to save his children.