Jordan Pitt

Penpusher · 61 points

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When a desperate father loses access to his only child, he attempts to take matters into his own hands, only to find himself taken hostage by his vindictive ex-wife.

March 7, 2017

on After an unsuccessful, drug-abusing reality-tv producer travels to a small Oklahoma town to see her recently-widowed Grandmother, she joins a backwater group of amateur cold-case investigators and becomes determined to solve a legendary local murder rumored to have been perpetrated by her own family.

Definitely too long - 30 words or under will suffice. ?As soon as I get half way I switch off - short, sweet and to the point will be more effective.
on Retreating from life after a tragedy, a detective on temporary leave finds out that recent murders are linked to his estranged wife and must help bring her to justice.

Just to add to the first comment, I think a description of what type of person the detective is would be useful, to help us connect with him straight away. ?Use any adjective you feel best describes him.