When a apathetic policeman's new-born son is kidnapped he will do everything in his power to expose a corrupted Chinese state and it?s network of child traffickers to get his son back.

Hi, small thing:

Making it 'when an apathetic policeman' rather than 'when a apathetic policeman' will makes this logline read better.

andrewclau:

I like both!

And the government policy of one-child per family raises the stakes: Ttis is not only his son, but the only child he's ever supposed to have. And, as in most cultures (alas) boys are preferred to girls.

Best wishes with your story.

Two possible routes for this story.

In one version, the policeman is young, naive and straight out of training. His son is kidnapped. His goal is to find his son and in the process of trying to get help he is confronted with apathetic superiors and a corrupted system. The logline for this would be:

When child-traffickers kidnap his new-born son, a naive Chinese policeman will fight apathetic superiors and a corrupt system to get his son back.

In the second version, the policeman is older, and has been part of the corruption himself for a long time - he's turned a blind eye to it in order to survive.

When child-traffickers kidnap his new-born son, a world-weary Chinese policeman will struggle with corrupted, apathetic peers before taking things into his own hands to find his son.