When a 20 year old girl inherits her family’s land surrounding a mysterious lake, she must fight developers to save both the lake and her alien boyfriend.

The pilot plot for "Breaking Bad" is a model for how to craft a logline and a storyline. ?The ?logline not only lays down the inciting incident and objective goal but also the stakes: ?he's doing it for the sake of his family -- not for himself. To make enough money for their welfare after he dies.

So he's doing an illegal, socially unacceptable act -- cooking meth -- which is dramatically justified by a socially acceptable motive, to provide for the future of his family.

Good advice, dpg. Often times I try to include multiple objectives within my logs to make things sound more meaty.

I often go back to the log for Breaking Bad:

A high school chemistry teacher diagnosed with inoperable lung cancer turns to manufacturing and selling methamphetamine in order to secure his family's future.

This just falls under the perfect category for me.

A logline should describe a plot driven by a unity of action, one primary throughline of action. ?So which is the unity of action, the organizing principle of the plot? ?The lake or her boyfriend? ?Pick one and build the logline and plot around that.

If it's the lake, what's so mysterious about the lake that it makes she MUST fight to save it. ?And save it from what? Developers? ?Who is her adversary? ?Who poses the threat to fate of the lake?