When a 17 year-old does a work for the dole program at a Sydney Car Wash for a businessman, he becomes entangled into his shady world while his dreams of wrestling at the 2000 Olympic Games becomes more and more distant by the year. Note: This is a TV pilot.

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Neer Shelter Singularity · 55,464 pts

This is not a goal for an episode nor for a season, "...one day wrestle at the Olympic Games?" is an ambition. This is because he is an amateur wrestler with no professional or competitive experience and the road to Olympic qualification is long.

What specific goal does he need to achieve in episode one that will get him closer to achieving his ambition? Think of each episode as a stepping stone closer to achieving his ambition plot out the necessary milestones he needs to have reached/achieved before he makes it onto the Olympic team.

Each one of these could be an episode specific goal.

This is the writers job to come up with these goals and the plots to achieve them a few I can think of now are:
To earn a specific amount of money to be able to afford a Gi.
Or to get a membership in a local dojo?
Perhaps he wants to prove himself to his dream Sensei.

Then using a logline you can work on the structure of the pilot episode to achieve that specific goal.

dpg Singularity · 112,231 pts

The most important element to adapt from "Breaking Bad" is an attention grabbing pilot episode, one that hooks the audience, makes them want to tune in next week to see what happens next.

CraigDGriffiths Singularity · 20,463 pts

Caleb you start thinking about cast get the story right. I mean what is the theme? What is the arc of the character? How will he change? You may be able to achieve that in an hour. Don't tie yourself to a length or series, after all it isn't in your control.

My brother had a series on SBS, "Comedy School" they purchased eight shows. Halfway through production they dropped it to four. The show did great, rated well, Sydney Morning Herald had it down as the show to watch in its time slot. They didn't go to a second season.

This may sound negative. I just want you to focus on what is in your control. Writing a killer story. Once you sell it move on to the next one. If you are a writer (which is something you feel not do) you will have a hundred stories to tell.

PS don't worry if you think your story has element from other stories, everything does. Avatar and Dances With Wolves are the same film in different settings.