3 reviews
If this is a story about two guys who are friends and one declares his love; but the other is straight, it should be made clear in the logline because that is the hook.
If this is a story about a boy and a girl who are friends and one declares his or her love, then the logline needs a hook, it needs that one extra thing to reel the reader in.
Is this a feature film or short?
It seems to lack enough plot for a full-length feature. The action is vague, who ends up doing what for most of act two?
Lastly, "...turns hostile..." I can understand if it gets awkward but why hostile?
>>>their love
"Their' refers to "one of them" which means that grammatically it should ?say either "his love" or "her love'". ? ?Well, which one is it?
And what becomes the objective goal as a result of the hostility?