Two bitterly-divorced CDC epidemiologists are called to investigate a disease outbreak at a mountain resort and uncover a government conspiracy that they must stop in order to survive.

I think I'm fine with the logline, except that I would expect the word "survive" to apply to the disease.? There needs to be more of a reason for them to want to stop the government conspiracy.? Is the conspiracy to spread the disease and kill them and other people?? Is the government planning something? that they want to keep under wraps and they want to kill these epidemiologists? (likely by exposing them to the disease... but maybe just shooting them) to silence them?? I'm assuming this government conspiracy is related to the disease, but the way the logline is written, it doesn't have to be.? (although it probably should be)

I read your latest revision, in response to Mike's comment, and actually, that one excites me more.? ?I find generalizing about conspiracies to be boring, actually.? I love the "leading mismatched survivors" concept, and the fact that the scientist isn't a natural leader.? Uniting is a part of leading though, so I'd just write "must learn to lead".? ?Sadly, in today's day and age, I think the phrase "transform its victims into deadly drones" is going to make people think about humans being transformed into those little flying robot drones that are popular today, so maybe I'd switch out that word if you can think of something better... but otherwise, yeah, I'd say you've got a winner there.

I prefer the original post about CDC epidemiologists, but agree that it's too wordy and not clear enough. Also, the government angle works well, and I think you should keep it in.

By making them CDC scientists working for the government, you're reducing the amount of coincidence the premise relies on. Otherwise, it feels contrived if they get trapped in a resort and by chance, are scientists who, again by chance, are equipped to research the fungus.

Definitely get more of a sense of horror from your amended version. I like that it could draw on previous horror films for inspiration. Have you played the game "The Last of Us"? If not, I highly recommend it.

I would still have a single protagonist who acts as the emotional conduit for this story. I quite liked the idea of the two scientists being divorced. It adds an element of humour to the situation and obvious conflict.

"Must work together" - can you be more specific? What must they work together to do? Find a cure? Escape?