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Ok will work on the original one . Thanks a lot everyone.
>>>A private detective sets 24 hours to solve any case or else quit
That's it, the very worse that can happen?? I think there should be bigger stakes, like someone's life at stake.? Someone will die if he doesn't crack the case.
>>>but the first case he receives can only be solved at the 25th hour.
But when he takes the case, he doesn't know that it's going to take more than 24 hours, right?? So this is a spoiler, giving away a? 3rd Act complication.? A logline should never contain a spoiler, a Big Reveal or Major Plot Twist.
Aha so your "superhero"was the adjective. So you should have stated in the first logline, A superhero detective....etc. Take the superhero out the logline and it is not a super concept anymore.