"Set in a futuristic world where humans are controlled by their fascist government, a career criminal gets drawn into a deadly plot when he rescues a upper class woman from the secret police and has to depend on her to survive."

I defy

9 reviews

Former member Penpusher · 20 pts

It sounds more like the woman is your real protagonist. She does more...

dpg Singularity · 112,231 pts

The logline keeps morphing such that I'm not sure what the kernel of the idea really is. Whatever, I suggest raising the stakes for the man: it's not a matter of just locating his daughter, it's also matter of also saving her life before...?

Bodhi 0 pts

dpg: thx for the notes.

In a Fascist future, a career criminal gets contacted by a swanky woman who needs his skillset to take over power of the government, and offers him the location of his lost daughter if he helps her.