Set against the backdrop of the social and political upheaval of the late 1800s in Europe, Mary is an unconventional and annoyingly intelligent woman struggling to alter the destiny and education of her gender – and still find love.

Thank you all so much! This has given me a lot to think about. I will re-post soon.

Agreed with Richieve and DPG, however, I don't think you need a 'based on a true story' element - it can work just as well as an entirely fictional story, if well told of course...

you describe two goals: "...struggling to alter the destiny and education of her gender..." and "...find love." which ever one of these has the great stakes for the main character, should be the only one mentioned in the logline. Loglines are best structured around single goals.

Good advice from Richiev. ?The concept needs fleshing out with specifics. ?"Struggling to alter the the destiny and education of her gender" -- how does that translate into a specific objective goal? And what is the inciting incident that triggers her struggle to achieve that goal? ?What are her personal stakes -- what does she stand to lose if she fails?

I think the story would have a stronger hook if based upon the life of a real historical character, a woman who willfully violated the social conventions of her time, defied the odds to forger her own career. ?Truth is stranger and often more compelling than fiction.