4 reviews
Like your last attempt, the premise is interesting. However, after the set-up of being stuck in a lease with his ex-wife, the rest of your story goes off in a different direction.
You have such a strong setup, the story should be about being stuck in a lease with his ex-wife. That's your hook.
The logline gives the protagonist a problem and a major complication but it fails to give him a dramatic objective goal.
Given the problem, given the complication what must he do?? What becomes his objective goal?
I loved knightrider's take on a previous version:
When offered a publishing deal for his guide to a successful marriage book, a struggling writer must convinces his ex to pretend to be his wife for a year while he finishes and publishes his book.
ha!!
Otherwise "navigating the intricacies of single life" seems vague & needs to be translated into a certain objective visual goal