Otherworldly occurrences and unnatural incidents stem the blossoming relationship between a bookish teacher and the mother of one of his problem students.

Glenarven

2 reviews

dpg Singularity · 112,231 pts

The characters in the logline are passive, acted upon, rather than acting. What do they DO about these "unnatural incidents"? How do they fight back?

Claude McIver 0 pts

The conflict is pretty vague and there is no stated goal. Here is a version that gives the couple something interesting as a starting off point and suggests a possible answer to the unnatural incidents.

"A widower teacher and his troublesome student's widowed mother find their growing romance has supernatural consequences."