Luke Ramsden

Logliner · 120 points

180 points to Logliner

10 loglines
19 reviews

Badges

Logliner

Loglines

After accidentally causing the death of her boss, an over-worked, guilt-ridden barmaid must avoid suspicion, while at the same deflecting the advances of her lascivious co-worker

October 9, 2020
Upon realising he has a super-fan, the emotionally volatile singer of a struggling band initially feels flattered; but he allows this feeling to darken into something obsessive and unhealthy as he and the fan begin an illicit dance of mutual shadowing, pursuing each other without ever actually meeting. So when the fan’s interest begins to wane, her happiness and the wellbeing of those around her is threatened by his unwillingness to give up her adoration.

April 14, 2019
When her prison-inmate pen pal shows up unexpectedly asking her to go on a trip with him, an introverted true-crime obsessive doesn’t know how to say no – especially when he reveals its to attend his parents golden wedding anniversary which he wasn’t invited.

February 22, 2018
An isolated young man, obsessed with the ’60s, accidentally invokes the ghost of a precocious young girl who was killed in the ’60s. As they work together to uncover the secret of her unsolved murder, the ghost’s awe at the modern world begins to show him that he’s living in the past.

January 23, 2017
An overambitious, scholarship student finds his place when he begins an unusual friendship with a depressed steel magnate. However, when both men fall a lonely primary school teacher, they must decide which relationship is more important.

January 23, 2017
After lying about being pregnant in order to spite her philandering partner, an antisocial young punk must face up to her responsibilities as she begins to realise the lengths to which he is willing to go in order to change his ways and face up to his.

January 23, 2017
Whilst working as a PA for the Mayor, a part-time poet is charged to facilitate an affair between his boss and a much younger woman. The PA and his lover, his boss’ wife, decide to spin the situation to their own advantage.

January 29, 2015
Six perfect strangers assemble to pull off the perfect crime, but when their simple robbery explodes into bloody ambush, the ruthless killers must work out which one amongst them is a police informer.

May 17, 2014
Otherworldly occurrences and unnatural incidents stem the blossoming relationship between a bookish teacher and the mother of one of his problem students.

May 14, 2014
Upon returning to her family home for her Grandfather?s christening, a head-strong young woman and her suspicious foreign fianc? must prove their relationship to the assembled guests ? including an undercover agent from the Immigration Office!

May 13, 2014

Recent reviews

on An ocean loving Swedish girl teams up with a trans teen, her mother and a rebellious teenager to find answer to her husbands fatal accident while working fruit picking. What they dum over is the dirty under belly of the working visa program putting all their lives in danger

Having experience with Australian immigration process, I'm into anything that highlights how draconian it is. That said, the logline is a bit convoluted. I would simplify it. I don't think the secondary characters need to be included, as it makes…
on A wealthy businessman who leads a double life manages to accept his homosexuality only after discovering that his son is struggling with the same conflict.

In that case, the situation makes perfect sense, but I do think that information needs to be included in the logline, as the context is important.
on A wealthy businessman who leads a double life manages to accept his homosexuality only after discovering that his son is struggling with the same conflict.

My question, from reading the logline, is when/where is this set? Is it a period piece, set in a time when homosexuality was less accepted than it is today, or is it set in a a place where it is…
on When a seemingly crazy man claims to be his wife’s rightful husband, a troubled counselor must must act like the seemingly crazy man if he’s to save his collapsing marriage.”

There's a lot going here, so I think it might be best to clarify a few things. First of all, who is the protagonist? The crazy man, the wife or the counsellor (who I'm assuming is the actual husband? That's…
on A college student and his girlfriend discovers windows to spy on their neighbors during Christmas only to find out one of them invades their home.

Reading this, there are a few things I'd want clarifying. Firstly, why are they spying? Boredom? Fetish? Are they looking for something specific? Secondly, who invades their home? Why is it important that this person in particular is the invader?…
on When an African American CIA operative is recruited by a secret global organisation, he must learn to master the art of time inversion, to stop a renegade Russian oligarch with precognition abilities, from starting World War III.

'Why does this organisation need this CIA operative' - I think Nolan should've been asked that question in the first place.
on After accidentally causing the death of her boss, an over-worked, guilt-ridden barmaid must avoid suspicion, while at the same deflecting the advances of her lascivious co-worker

That's an interesting point about being more specific with the cause of death; I wasn't whether being vague or specific would be the better option. Thanks.
on A modern adaptation of Shakespeare?s Julius Caesar, told from the cutthroat, conniving, and competitive world of a woman-ran Software Company.

Also - subpoint, and off topic. The title, 'Julila Caesar', is that a typo? Is it meant to be 'Julia Caesar', or is Julila a name I've just not heard before?
on A narcissistic womanizer finds the tables turned when a curse makes him irresistible to men. And the only cure may be consummating a gay marriage.

I'll be honest - this logline did set off my PC-alarm bells. I'm sure it's not meant to. I think that perhaps including the sentence 'And the only cure may be consummating a gay marriage' is what it was. How…
on Upon returning to her family home for her Grandfather?s christening, a head-strong young woman and her suspicious foreign fianc? must prove their relationship to the assembled guests ? including an undercover agent from the Immigration Office!

Valetin - I'm glad to hear someone else has had a similar experience to me, re: an elderly person getting christened. I didn't think it a particularly outlandish and unrealistic idea. I appreciate the comments, but again - I feel…
on A modern adaptation of Shakespeare?s Julius Caesar, told from the cutthroat, conniving, and competitive world of a woman-ran Software Company.

When transferring Shakespeare into a contemporary corporate setting, it's worth keeping in mind that Kurosawa did something with The Bad Sleep Well, a retelling of Hamlet. I suppose there would have to be some relevance or resonance that the story…
on A modern adaptation of Shakespeare?s Julius Caesar, told from the cutthroat, conniving, and competitive world of a woman-ran Software Company.

I recommend writing a logline to pitch the premise of Julius Caesar. As it's written at the moment, it's relying on the fact that the reader is familiar with the Shakespeare play (or the actual history). And whilst you don't…
on Upon returning to her family home for her Grandfather?s christening, a head-strong young woman and her suspicious foreign fianc? must prove their relationship to the assembled guests ? including an undercover agent from the Immigration Office!

I understand your points. However, it is important that the girl be head-strong as opposed to be weak-willed, for example - she is an active character, who's strong-headedness motivates the plot. It is meant to be a comedy. There is…
on Upon returning to her family home for her Grandfather?s christening, a head-strong young woman and her suspicious foreign fianc? must prove their relationship to the assembled guests ? including an undercover agent from the Immigration Office!

In regard to the Grandfather's christening. Odd as I know it is (it's meant to be), it is based on a personal experience of mine. I appreciate the concerns in regards to brevity, but as it is a rom-com/buddy movie…
on The new kid in town is eager to impress the two friends she just made, and tells them wild tales of her four guardians when the latter were hell-raising young women: Stories of murder, bank robberies, and other mayhem.

Is the 'new kid in town element' a framing device for the actual story, that of hell-raising young woman (such as in The Grand Budapest Hotel, or Stand By Me)? Or do the stories she recounts relate in someway to…
on After following a trail of clues that began with a cryptic E-mail, A tired middle-aged family man must enter a hidden world of supernatural mystery to save the soul of his childhood friend from an ancient secret society bent on hiding their existence at any cost.

I like the pitch. The story seems intersted, and I would be interested to know more. If there is any problem I think it is just with the way the logline is written. The sentence structure is odd and at…
on Seven year old JR nearly unwishes his talking Teddy Bear, Threadbare Fred Bear, until Fred (his guardian angel in disguise) takes him on a trip through the wishing tunnel, dodging wishes coming true, until they reach The Wish Factory where they watch elves, angels and The Big Guy manifest hopes, dreams, wishes and prayers.

Is the audience supposed to know that the bear is the boy's guardian angel from the get-go? If not, I would remove that part as it clouds the point. Also if the boy has unwished for the bear to no…
on An isolated English teacher in pakistan falls in love with his student only to be kidnapped by the taliban, his only chance of winning his love and life back is to teach English in 10 days to Osama Bin laden's successor.

I think that you should retain the specific number of days. Like Jim Corona says, it does provide a ticking clock. More importantly though, it begs the question of why: why does he need to learn English in such a…
on A family nurses an injured Angel that crashes onto their summer cottage roof back to health, hiding their foreign guest’s wings from curious neighbors until what injured the Angel returns.

'The premise requires a major suspension of disbelief. The logline raises more questions than it answers.' I don't understand how these things are a problem? Firstly a logline is an enticement, posing questions that you have read the script to…