Harlow Reeve, an orphaned teenager becomes aware of her teleportation abilities when she looks into her parents past. Social Media discloses her secret, when she is caught on camera, the world suddenly starts to become aware of her divergence

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lee_cee 0 pts

I am missing a clear sense of the character's goal. I can see the obstacle though, and it is an interesting idea. Perhaps re-think you're wording of the 'social media discloses it' part. Social media isn't an active person or character so perhaps it should be 'it's disclosed on social media'. Or perhaps 'someone discloses it on social media', maybe even introducing the antagonist? I'm also not getting the sense of a main antagonist either.

Former member Penpusher · 20 pts

I love it... are you a professional writer

CraigDGriffiths Singularity · 20,463 pts

I agree with dpg. What does she want? What prevents her getting it? There is gold there, it just needs to be mined.