Fueled by a childhood experience with a haunted house, a passionate paranormal believer and her lifelong best friend use their extensive knowledge of scary movies to help clients solve their own paranormal problems.

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Richiev Singularity · 82,714 pts

You shouldn't use backstory as your inciting incident. It is not immediate enough.

Think about Supernatural, the two brothers have a backstory that's important to the overall story, but it is the immediate supernatural murder of the girlfriend that sets the story in motion.
Also, they have a specific goal; find their father.

So what is the immediate incident that sets the story in motion?
What's the lead characters specific goal; as set into motion by the inciting incident?