Forced to selling her life over by a mean spirited Crip, a cold hearted street dancer, must rise above , in order to be with a successful photographer who is the only one capable of bringing her peace and love.

by NicoleDash 41 pts

2 reviews

Richiev Singularity · 82,714 pts ★ Accepted

Forced to selling (Sell) her life over... What does this mean in practical terms? Are you talking prostitution, or are you talking a bad airtight contract of some sort?

Must rise above... Rise above what? This should probably be dropped

in order to be with a successful photographer... How does this relate to selling her life over?

You have an inciting incident and you have a goal, so that is good, I am just not sure how they relate to one another.
I think with a little clarity this will be a much better logline.

Richiev Singularity · 82,714 pts

Honestly the story about being forced into a life debt sound far more interesting than the love story.
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When she is forced into a life debt by the unscrupulous man who saved her life,? an honor-bound amateur?dancer searches for a way out while being compelled to take compromising photos of her corrupt 'saviors' enemies"