Driven to sea by a father with a murderous past, a Viking prince is pursued by the gods and a dark temptress in his quest for redemption.
WESTVIKING
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WESTVIKING
What is the quest for redemption? It's too vague. What is the item or place he is trying to get to which metaphorically signifies his redemption? What specifically has he done that he must atone for?
1] The logline frames the prince as fleeing from negative forces instead of struggling toward a positive specific objective goal. ("Quest for redemption" is vague and subjective.)
2] And there is nothing in the logline to indicate why he needs to be on a "quest for redemption" -- what's his flaw? It's the old man who has a "murderous past" -- not the prince. And it's no sin to be pursued by a "dark temptress"; it's only a sin to give in to temptation.
So why does he need to be on a "quest for redemption" when there is nothing in the logline to indicate what evil he has done or sins he has committed?