Death, the grim reaper, is fired from his job and must now do the one thing he has next to no knowledge of – get a life!

LIFE after DEATH

8 reviews

Nicholas Andrew Halls Samurai · 1,742 pts

Love the set up "After he's fired, the grim reaper ..."

But what the heck is the rest of your movie about? It could literally be about ANYTHING right now. You need to be super specific about what the BULK of your movie is about.

barnesworld 0 pts

Really compelling concept Josh, I want to see this film. It sounds ace when you explain it more, but I agree with Richiev, trim the fat and add that either obstacle/ticking clock/consequence if he doesn't do it. This is such a massive set up - only one man has ever done this unique job and he's fired. He is the GATEKEEPER between life and the next world. Perhaps if he doesn't find a job (or meaning to his LIFE) then the guy who took his job sends him to hell? Or something like that. I think even though it's a comedy, and obviously is, with such big themes and characters, it needs that big consequence too which dpg talks about. And if you did trim it and add that, then I think a producer would just say "how much do you need to make it?" and you'd be away. I hope that helps mate.

Josh Villemure 0 pts

Ha never heard of those, will definitely check those out. In my story Death actually has a best friend/room mate named Morty. But Death doesn't become a farmer (damn I never thought of that, but glad I didn't). The joke for my story is Death gets a job with a dying industry - Movie Rental Business. Building towards essentially Morty giving Death a checklist of ways to "establish" a life. It involves 1) Getting a new job. 2) Getting a place to live (he kind of just mooches off Morty) 3) Find a girlfriend (this happens cause Death falls in love, but has no way of knowing what to do about it), and 4) Get some hobbies (because after he is fired, Death just watches movies ALL day long, and makes messes and doesn't clean them, so Morty wants him getting active and meeting other people - anything to help what is clearly a grieving Death).

fighter200 81 pts

i love the concept and the humor is spot on

Adam Bernstr?m Samurai · 1,133 pts

There are two Discworld novels, with similar plots, you might want to read. Always good to know, so you can differentiate your script from those stories. First there's "Mort" which might not be that much similar, but it is about Death getting an apprentice, and the second one is "Reaper Man," where Death actually is fired, and takes a job on a farm because, after all he's good with a scythe. Both novels are by Terry Pratchett.

Richiev Singularity · 82,714 pts

Death, the grim reaper, is fired from his job and must now do the one thing he has next to no knowledge of ? get a life!
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Oddly enough, as short as this logline is, it uses too many words. If you cut the extra words, you could add a few things that could help the logline.
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Death, the grim reaper (Repetitive, don't need to say it twice.)
When Death....

is fired from his job (What else are you going to be fire from but a job... so you don't need to say it)
is fired...

and must now do the one thing he has next to no knowledge of ? get a life!
he must do what he has no knowledge of- get a life!
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"When the death is fired (because of this reason) he has one week to learn the true meaning of life if he's to get his old job back."
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Hope that helped, good luck with this!

Josh Villemure 0 pts

Well isn't it enough with just knowing, if you don't have a job... you are dead weight to society. Some might argue you have no purpose or place. Right? This is more so just suppose to be a comedy, and Death has no real insight on 'living', as he was always working (so to speak). Now he has no clue what to do.

dpg 112,231 pts

When the grim reaper is fired from his job, he must do the one thing he doesn't know how to do -- get a life.

But... what's at stake? What if he fails? What are the consequences for him -- [ironically] his own death? (And could there be a ticking clock?)