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A dying playboy has to expose the lying fianc? of a brilliant woman so she can find true love, but falls in love with her himself.

November 30, 2014
In 2097, Islamic State?s genius operative befriends and covertly recruits the CIA?s foremost agent and develops a weapon like nothing in history or fiction.

November 30, 2014
An emotional comedy about a dying playboy in his 30s, planning to host his own funeral, who falls in love for the first time, with an engaged woman.

November 21, 2014

on A young journalist must turn detective when he gets caught up in the fatal conspiracy behind the Jack the Ripper murders.

Hi, I'd say be more specific in your revised logline - we connect and care about the main characters you present. In this you have some potentially gripping but then the stakes are generic - more lives are lost -…
on An emotional comedy about a dying playboy in his 30s, planning to host his own funeral, who falls in love for the first time, with an engaged woman.

What about this one then guys: A dying playboy has to expose the lying fianc? of a brilliant woman so she can find true love, but falls in love with her himself.
on Death, the grim reaper, is fired from his job and must now do the one thing he has next to no knowledge of – get a life!

Really compelling concept Josh, I want to see this film. It sounds ace when you explain it more, but I agree with Richiev, trim the fat and add that either obstacle/ticking clock/consequence if he doesn't do it. This is such…
on In the throes of the Russian Revolution, down-to-earth Nadya gives little importance to thoughts of romance. When love does come to her, it is tainted by his lingering infatuation with a mysterious beauty. Fed up with loneliness, she throws caution to the wind. But when her rival comes back into his life her identity threatens to shatter more than just their budding relationship.

Hi, from what I have read an ideal logline is 25 words maximum. I often struggle to hit this, but while you need to set your world, I do think even if you do go over 25 words you still…
on An emotional comedy about a dying playboy in his 30s, planning to host his own funeral, who falls in love for the first time, with an engaged woman.

Very perceptive, it's about him not being selfish any more, thanks for stopping by
on An emotional comedy about a dying playboy in his 30s, planning to host his own funeral, who falls in love for the first time, with an engaged woman.

hi, thanks for this, yeah, a couple of other people highlighted this too - thanks, i's really helpful t osee what I've missed...I'll get that DOES bit in there now. Best
on An emotional comedy about a dying playboy in his 30s, planning to host his own funeral, who falls in love for the first time, with an engaged woman.

hi, thanks for the analysis, that's really helpful.
on An emotional comedy about a dying playboy in his 30s, planning to host his own funeral, who falls in love for the first time, with an engaged woman.

thanks - and you've given him an objective too