Josh Villemure

Recent reviews

• on Death, the grim reaper, is fired from his job and must now do the one thing he has next to no knowledge of – get a life!

  Ha never heard of those, will definitely check those out. In my story Death actually has a best friend/room mate named Morty. But Death doesn't become a farmer (damn I never thought of that, but glad I didn't). The joke…

• on A young man discovers a journal from the future (writen by a future version of him-self) and makes it his mission to attempt to prevent the events that lead to the apocalyptic future from happening; such as mutant fly attacks, alien invasions, zombie infections, evil clones, time vortexes and activists.

  Thanks! yea that was some good stuff. I have modified it so now he knows the state of the future based on the journal. Now it is a matter of him and others actually believing it. Another thing worth knowing…

• on Death, the grim reaper, is fired from his job and must now do the one thing he has next to no knowledge of – get a life!

  Well isn't it enough with just knowing, if you don't have a job... you are dead weight to society. Some might argue you have no purpose or place. Right? This is more so just suppose to be a comedy, and…

• on A young man discovers a journal from the future (writen by a future version of him-self) and makes it his mission to attempt to prevent the events that lead to the apocalyptic future from happening; such as mutant fly attacks, alien invasions, zombie infections, evil clones, time vortexes and activists.

  Yea... its actually for a comic book :p And well he can't possibly know how bad and bleak the future is. But I set it up so we see it within the first five pages of my first script. But…

• on When a rejected talking golf ball loses his original owner, he teams up with his new friend to enact revenge.

  What is his new friend? Man? Golf ball? Why does the talking golf ball want revenge? What happened that made them separate, and is it something the talking golf ball really needs to get revenge with? After years of success,…

• on ?When a workaholic single gay man travel to a conservative russian business convent, he must engaged a family of strangers to act as his own, to get the important business deal, but the family turns out to be – the family from hell"

  There are a few grammatical errors in this, and there is a lot of exposition that is not really important to the plot of the story. Is his being gay really relevant or at all a key item of the…

• on "when a single mom and new employee journalist realize that the newspaper closed a case about a multi-international company poisoned the water, she must begin to investigate the case herself, but realizes the strong forces, that will do everything for the company to continue its establishment on the island."

  There is a lot happening here, and I feel like you could condense this and make it flow better. Is the single-mother a really important aspect? Is that the only thing that defines the character? Focus should be made more…