Brought together in the shadow of teleportation and world faith, neither Rupert nor Levi thought to save humanity; one must, before the other does.
The Second Coming
Where screenwriters learn the form and logline their screen ideas.
The Second Coming
I second (third?) the comments already made regarding the logline, but would also suggest when you do your next draft, to try and keep it clear who your protagonist is (is the audience watching a film about Rupert or Levi?)
Richiev / dpg
I see your point, I was so wrapped in telling what happens without telling what happens!
Looking back I think I've written a Tagline not a Logline!
Thanks
What Richiev said.
And why must one save humanity before the other? Why can't they can't do it together?
And why do they have to save the world at all? What's the threat?