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Here would be an example of a character who 'must' find the ring: (Obviously your logline will be different)
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"When a bumbling crown prince loses his mother's royal signet ring, He has three days before the signing of an important peace treaty to find the ring, or lose his place as heir to the throne"
Now the lead 'must' find the ring... Why him? because he lost it. What are the consequences? He will lose the crown.?
So in your logline you should add the element which makes it of vital importance the lead find the ring. It will make the logline more compelling and draw the reader in.
I can usually get a range of the mental picture a logline is about, but this one has me stumped.
Enshrouded identity and out of the blue is strange for me and doesn?t talk of action.
The Prince of (whatever) heads to Malta under an assumed identity in search of a lost historic signet ring hoping to .........
Whatever is his goal.
Bringing joy to an aging Queen Elizabeth
Restore the people?s faith in the monarch
Earn the love of his grandmother
Prove he is more than a party animal
You get the point.