An old, abusive slave owner switches body with his slave who gives him a taste of his own medicine
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What is the inciting incident? Why would an abusive slave owner willing switch bodys with his slave? Or does something force the body switch?
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Agreed with the above.
It would be better if both slave and owner learn something. The lesson the owner undergoes is obvious, but the slave's isn't.
What if after the slave inhabits the owner's body, he becomes hell-bent on revenge, gets it, but then wants more. The audience should be happy to see the owner get his comeuppance, but then if structured well, things change around the mid-point. The slave ventures on a dark path, and the more he keeps trying to avenge the injustice he received, the more he realises that he's crossed a line and is becoming as bad as his former tormentor.
Just a thought.
I think the real question is, is this story, torture porn or not?
If that is what the story is about,? logline actually works.
A mean white slave owner switches bodies with his slave, and then the audience watches in glee as the former slave owner is beaten, whipped, degraded, and abuse, end of story...
However, if this is a morality tale, then you need to give your lead character a goal.
So what goal would be the irony of ironies?
Perhaps after he is transformed into a slave, and beaten by his former slave turned white, he must escape and find the underground railroad, the very people that in the beginning of the story he called traitors to the south.
And on top of that all his slave owner buddies are now after him with dogs and shotguns, and he realizes that skin color is just that, and nothing more, he is still the same person on the inside but just because his skin is now black he is seen as less than human.
Perhaps the key is crossing the Mason Dixon line.
Once the lead character crosses the line into the north he's is changed back, but with a new perspective on race and what makes a person human, because the people who helped him were more human than his former friends who turned on him the moment his skin changed.