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That sounds really interesting :)
Agreed with DPG.
The finding a safe haven from the Zombies is the A plot, all the other interpersonal stuff is the B and C plots - but loglines are about describing the A plot.
The biggest dramatic problem, the driving conflict of the plot, is a zombie apocalypse; yet it's not mentioned until literally at the end of the logline. ?If it's that important, it should lead off the logline, not end it.
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