(REVISED.) When the reluctant Sheriff of Sweetwater on a colony of Mars stumbles on a plan to destroy the town to make room for an illegal worm farm, he and his friends have to defend the town he loves from a megalomaniac Soybean Magnate.

Reluctant to be sheriff and yeah, that needs to be clarified.

Clarification on "the reluctant Sheriff..." Reluctant to be a sheriff or reluctant to take on the soybean "maggot"? A picky point, I grant you, but every word in a logline must contribute to a clear, unambiguous snapshot of the plot.

Also, the logline is 43 words in length. An operative rule for writing a logline is "less is more, more is less". I have compiled a database of over 1100 winning loglines; that is, loglines for scripts that actually got made into movies. Not one of the winning loglines exceeds 40 words in length. (The statistical average word length is 25 words.)

FWIW

FWIW, I designed the script to be the cheapest version of the story. The city is domed so it's all soundstages with full control. And the exterior shots are at the barest minimum.

It''ll cost but not as much as you think.

FWIW: I don't see anything in the logline that makes it *necessary* for the story to be set on Mars. OK, it's different--but is it absolutely necessary? Why is it the case that the plot wouldn't work on any other planet/setting?

Setting the story on Mars signals to would-be producers that they will have to budget in extra $,$$$,$$$ for special effects and props. The plot should justify that additional expense.

Just saying.