alliparker

Penpusher · 70 points

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2 loglines
6 reviews

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An introverted bookworm returns to her country hometown to find that her younger brother is dating the girl who made her life hell in high school and they must work together to survive a zombie apocalypse.

September 22, 2016
An independent twenty-something woman buys her first house, only to have her father show up on her doorstep announcing that he's left her mother and is moving in.

July 3, 2013

on sorry… just wanted to delete and couldn’t see how…

I'm not sure what actually happens in the movie? You've described two events that happen early - his lover goes missing and his father gets released from prison. But what is the arc of the film? Is the detective trying…
on A mafia wife assumes control and seeks revenge for her husband?s murder, and when she discovers her daughter is pregnant by the son of the charming, handsome killer, she pursues a different path that forces her to come to terms with her own blossoming feelings for him.

I agree with dpg, the storyline of the daughter isn't as crucial in a logline. It's more of a plot twist element that belongs in a synopsis when you have more time to give it the attention it deserves.
on An independent twenty-something woman buys her first house, only to have her father show up on her doorstep announcing that he's left her mother and is moving in.

Hi Isabelle! I was wondering about that too (the unfinished nature of the logline), hence why I put it up in this incarnation. I suppose this is more of a "premise" logline, in that it explains the hook. Each season…
on Santa F

Even if it's a completed story and there's no script for it yet, you can still write a logline using the format that B8C outlined for you. Perhaps something like: Major Event: His wife dies and children go missing Hero:…
on When an honest high school football star kills a young woman while driving drunk, his morals are put to the test when those he respects cover up the crime.

I agree with the other comments - I think 'honourable' is stronger than 'honest'. But I think the concept is strong - it certainly sets up both the mental and physical in the story and you can see what the…
on A determined boy separated from his newfound sweetheart must cross the Bass Strait and come to the rescue before Tasmania is destroyed by rising sea levels.

This revised version works SO much better than the previous. How old is the boy? (I'm asking more because I'm curious :))

An introverted bookworm returns to her country hometown to find that her younger brother is dating the girl who made her life hell in high school and they must work together to survive a zombie apocalypse.

An independent twenty-something woman buys her first house, only to have her father show up on her doorstep announcing that he's left her mother and is moving in.