An honorable Mossad assassin must kill his illegitimate daughter, Miss Palestine, before she blows herself up, while advocating global hate at an Israeli-Palestinian peace summit.

Deadly?Assessment

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Rutger Oosterhoff Samurai · 930 pts

Yes DGP, the word must be illegitimate . That's what you get when English is not your native language. "The mother was Palestinian who raised her after a clandestine affair with a Jewish man? Nobody but the parents know her true patrimony?" Yes, that's it! But should this be in the logline?

Former member Penpusher · 20 pts

Thanks Rutger. Those books provide good screenwriting structure. As I'm sure you know though, strict adherence to specific story structure stifles creativity, which is why, as you alluded to earlier, you end up with the same worn-out "paint-by-numbers" story over and over again in Hollywood. Still, it's a good idea to know the rules - and what works - before you decide to break them.

Good luck with your story.

Rutger Oosterhoff Samurai · 930 pts

I dig all of your last post Gilamesh: I now also now that you are a fan of "The Writers Journey"- Christopher Vogler and "Save the Cat" - blake Snyder. These books kill it!