An amateur conwoman attempts to manipulate a paranoid ex-con into getting rid of the landlord who's blackmailing her. But as his illness deepens can either of them trust anyone?

Second Skin

4 reviews

LoglinesRUS 0 pts

Agree with the above comments. Shorten to one sentence that is 35-40 words. Answer who has what illness. Emphasis what will happen if the con doesn't work out. What is the conflict? And what is in jeopardy?

W Siegfried Jerrett 0 pts

I am sure there is a great story here but for me it is not coming through totally clear yet two things struck me, i was not sure whose illness it was, the landlord or the ex-con and for some reason i had to read it a couple of times to understand it,

kjk11 0 pts

Could you shorten to one sentence and define the illness and who has it.