W Siegfried Jerrett

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On the verge of striking it rich an intergalactic diamond huntress is summoned to earth for compulsory breeding, but she is kidnapped by a ruthless space pirate en-route and must fight for her freedom to make it home before she is sentenced to death.

September 17, 2013
On the verge of destroying his career and his marriage, a washed up writer imprisons himself in his office where his characters begin to appear in the flesh, but when they are murdered one by one, he must come to terms with the dark secrets of his childhood before he loses his livelihood, his family and his sanity.

September 17, 2013

on While appraising old and rare books at a restored colonial plantation, a book collector stumbles across a series of diaries that chronicle an alien visitation in 1781.

totally with you, like the narrator scenes in rocky horror picture show, he is an interesting and entertaining part of the film, but would not be written into the logline
on An epidemic of mutant creatures attack unsuspecting victims while in the bathroom causing the mayor to call for federal help to save the city.

Sounds interesting but I think it needs to clearly state who the protagonist is. Is it the mayor, one of the victims, or a hero that comes to save the city?
on Everyone has secrets. What extent will the people of Splendid Harbor, NH go to keep their secrets from becoming known? Worlds will be rocked and someone will die as each unveiled secret brings up darker secrets from a prominent family's past …

Although this creates mystery and some sense of wanting to know what the secrets are, I feel that you need to give more information to grab our attention. For example, all I really know from this logline is that the…
on On the verge of destroying his career and his marriage, a washed up writer imprisons himself in his office where his characters begin to appear in the flesh, but when they are murdered one by one, he must come to terms with the dark secrets of his childhood before he loses his livelihood, his family and his sanity.

Great feedback and excellent pun !! Based on your comments, how about this : When a washed up writer starts living in his office his characters begin appearing in the flesh, but as they are murdered one by one, he…
on An amateur conwoman attempts to manipulate a paranoid ex-con into getting rid of the landlord who's blackmailing her. But as his illness deepens can either of them trust anyone?

I am sure there is a great story here but for me it is not coming through totally clear yet two things struck me, i was not sure whose illness it was, the landlord or the ex-con and for some…

On the verge of striking it rich an intergalactic diamond huntress is summoned to earth for compulsory breeding, but she is kidnapped by a ruthless space pirate en-route and must fight for her freedom to make it home before she is sentenced to death.