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When a young Chicano male meets up with a beautiful cultured Salsa dancer two dissimilar worlds collide to form one incredible dance duo.

October 26, 2013
A couple find they are better in bed than in a serious relationship and seek the help of professionals, friends and family to make their troubled relationship work.

October 26, 2013
After her brother is gunned down by a notorious Hispanic gang, a young woman grows up to become an undercover detective and infiltrates the deadly gang to bring them to justice.

October 26, 2013
When a cloning experiment by genetic scientist goes horribly wrong, the military sends their best man to clean up and avert an international crisis.

October 10, 2013
When the NSA director admits to domestic spying then solicits the aid of the best hackers, a small band of hackers decide to fight what they feel is wrong only to be entwined in an international terrorist threat and discover their initial instincts were wrong.

October 10, 2013
When a playboy, slacker returns to join his father?s growing corporate empire, tensions mount between his toe-the-line older brother over who is better suited to run the company.

October 5, 2013
After having searched around the world for the perfect girl, a young man finds just what he?s been looking for in his own small town where a high school friend has always been waiting for him.

October 2, 2013
When a father and son novice racing team decides to enter the Baja 500 they face challenges to survive not only the race but drug dealers and corrupt Mexican military.

October 2, 2013
When a hitman, who talks in his sleep, confesses to multiple murders to a hooker with a big mouth, the people who hired him and the police are out to catch him.

September 25, 2013
When an author encounters the characters he writes in the real world, creating a number of awkward and humorous moments, he must help them assimilate or return to the stories they belong in.

September 25, 2013

on WGA Registration Number: 1680921 An older black woman who suffers from insomnia. She is afraid to fall asleep because once she does she is placed inside a real life threatening situation that she must save the ones involved or they will all die. She tries to convince friends what is happening… They think she is loosing her mind and want to put her into a mental asylum to get help…The only way she is able to awake is when they are brought to safety…..

Dee, I agree with Richiev. This is not a logline as much as it is a synopsis. A logline should be 35-45 words with no sentence breaks. Also, consider not including the WGA registration. This is the no.1 No-No for…
on When a father and son novice racing team decides to enter the Baja 500 they face challenges to survive not only the race but drug dealers and corrupt Mexican military.

Thanks Tony. Interesting spin. DPG: There will always be reasons not to do something in life. Life is hard. But, many are driven just by the thrill of attempting to do something. Can I face this and come out the…
on Killing is what he is afraid of. The circumstantial choice of becoming a writer because of his past costs him desertion and rejection from her lover. The writer never gives up. After several years of exploration and reaching the new highs he becomes the Times Contributor Of the Year to prove his mettle. All fame and name is enough, but he realizes why still he is not at peace and kills himself when at his peak.

This is not a logline as much as it is a synopsis. WilsonDownUnder is correct that you must be able to tell the story of your script in one sentence using only 35-45 words. Good luck.
on When a playboy, slacker returns to join his father?s growing corporate empire, tensions mount between his toe-the-line older brother over who is better suited to run the company.

Great comments! Yes, the playboy is the protagonist. Adding the element of urgency with a sick father is a nice touch as well as making the older brother corrupt. Thanks for work-shopping.
on When a father and son novice racing team decides to enter the Baja 500 they face challenges to survive not only the race but drug dealers and corrupt Mexican military.

dpg: Great questions. First, many off-road teams are two people. Yes, there are single driver vehicles, but in this case my focus is on the dynamic not only of a racing team (amateur I might add) as well as the…
on When a father and son novice racing team decides to enter the Baja 500 they face challenges to survive not only the race but drug dealers and corrupt Mexican military.

DPG: NIce. I admit, your version could be very exciting as well. Thank you for confirming the entire reason LoglinesRUs exists: to explore storytelling and development through the use of loglines. I love the fact that my simple logline could…
on Vibrant animals, big and small roamed over the grey world of Land, Sea and air, however time is running out.

Joey, this isn't really a logline. Who is the main character? The protagonist? What is the conflict other than extinction? Since extinction can take decades, how is the conflict illustrated? Is this an animated movie. A documentary? Not sure what…
on After having searched around the world for the perfect girl, a young man finds just what he?s been looking for in his own small town where a high school friend has always been waiting for him.

Good comments. Food for thought to develop this into a stronger concept. This was envisioned as a character piece. His conflict is internal believing that happiness is out there somewhere when in fact in can sometimes be right in front…
on When a father and son novice racing team decides to enter the Baja 500 they face challenges to survive not only the race but drug dealers and corrupt Mexican military.

DPG, by recasting as championship racers you have completely missed the point of where the conflict comes in and why the audience should be invested. If the father and son are Nikki Lauder and James Hunt of off-road then they…
on A laid-back man-child?s quest to get rich quick is disrupted when he becomes the legal guardian of a pugnacious twelve year old girl.

If he is laid-back, does he really "quest" to get rich? That seems somewhat contradictory. I like Richiev's title ideas. Very clever. But, when did the man-child become a con artist? I think, once you resolve who the man child…