Discovering she was only hired to fill a quota, a family-oriented mother bands with other ?tokens? to prove her unappreciative boss wrong by winning a big contract for the firm.

Hello I'm new to this group. I like the premise and the log line, but I don't understand why the protagonist in a white woman. When I think of a token in a corporate work, a white woman is probably the last person that comes to mind, unless the company is finance, tech,? science or another? completely male dominated field.? I think your script would work better with a high achieving Black, Latino? or Bi racial woman, maybe there is a white woman who works in another department who plays a role in helping her.
Just a thought.

Richiev makes a valid point about avoiding the trite and tired trope of a white, male, Ivy League educated boss.

However, if the boss is female is she also white?? And is the token employee white or...?? How does race play into the plot?? ?What is the race/ethnic group of the protagonist (and? the other tokens)?

Sounds like it's working. My only suggestions

- describing the mother as 'family-oriented' suggests that this will be the flaw that she will overcome (ie. she will need to learn that work must be prioritised over family). Not sure if that's the intention or not, but certainly from context and the way that loglines GENERALLY describe their characters, that's the implication.

- is there a more visual way to describe the objective goal (winning the contract). What must they do, specifically, and can it be described in a more visual manner? (This is a piece of advice given to me on my own recent logline submission, and I think it's pretty on the money.) Can it be described more specifically?

Good stuff!