After drawing the death card from an ancient tarot deck a skeptical young woman must use the other cards to escape her fate.

DrawnFate

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FFF Mentor · 7,850 pts

Hello, I suggest to change the inciting event into "drawing a bad set of cards" or something like this because the deat card doesn't mean death as the previous comment says. But the main problem is in the second part of the logline which is too vague. You describe a symbolic pattern but you should describe more clearly what wee see in the movie. How is she attacked or concretely doomed by the bad tarots? How the tarots can help her to escape her fate?

Former member Penpusher · 20 pts

I'm not sure where you are coming from here. Drawing a death card in tarot doesn't mean you will die.

Former member Penpusher · 20 pts

I find this logline too cryptic. Maybe by describing the incident that turns her from a skeptic to a believer will help you get to the heart of this story. And maybe give us at least a hint as to how the other cards can help her escape her fate.