After a fantastic date using new holographic technology, a struggling journalist is determined to meet the woman he loves in person. The problem is, she's a scientist aboard the International Space Station on a secret mission to save the earth.

Expedition 69

3 reviews

Nicholas Andrew Halls Samurai · 1,742 pts

I think you've described an interesting event, but haven't indicated a compelling action which the bulk of your screenplay will revolve around. (Determining to do something is not the same as doing that thing). Is his goal to get her fired from her job so she has to return to Earth, or is it to travel into space to meet her? It's important to provide this a) because it will determine whether it sounds like there is enough conflict to sustain a feature length film, and b) because if you're pitching the film using the logline, specificity with the compelling action the protagonist takes allows whoever you're pitching to to get a clearer idea of scope and budget necessary to produce your screenplay.

Richiev Singularity · 82,714 pts

"After falling in love on a holo-date, a down-on his-luck Journalist vows to meet the woman of his dreams in person, the only problem... she's out of this world."