Jonathan_Peace

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2 loglines
3 reviews

After a fantastic date using new holographic technology, a struggling journalist is determined to meet the woman he loves in person. The problem is, she's a scientist aboard the International Space Station on a secret mission to save the earth.

November 28, 2014
When obsession turns to murder, writer Joe Pittman must find and stop the one responsible for turning his dreams into a nightmare, before his secret can be revealed.

November 17, 2014

on After a fantastic date using new holographic technology, a struggling journalist is determined to meet the woman he loves in person. The problem is, she's a scientist aboard the International Space Station on a secret mission to save the earth.

Think you nailed it there Richiev.
on When obsession turns to murder, writer Joe Pittman must find and stop the one responsible for turning his dreams into a nightmare, before his secret can be revealed.

Thanks for the feedback guys. You were absolutely right - lots of words but nothing really said. "When his agent is killed, a troubled writer with a dark past must find and confront an obsessed fan before they can kill…
on Robbed of her childhood after a tragedy, a young woman struggles to get her life on track. After a passionate romance, she finally begins to see a future for herself, but her past makes her a danger to everyone she loves and she must learn to heal before her future is taken from her too.

It feels like there are two warring loglines here. I'd develop the first sentence into your logline, maybe something like: Following a childhood tragedy, a young woman's life spirals out of control and so she must learn to heal before…