A shy young girl wants to tell the real cause of her a friend's death because she was always bothered by her in her dreams but she is afraid that she might be accused of being a part of the crime and so she started to stalk her suspected killer only to realize that the death was self inflicted.

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2 reviews

artistami 0 pts

It is really wordy. If it is not vital to the story you don't need it in the log line. A shy girl risks her own innocence by stalking her best friend's killer only to discover a horrifying truth.

dpg Singularity · 112,231 pts

>>> only to realize that the death was self inflicted

The logline seems to be a spoiler, giving away how the story ends. A logline should indicate where a story is going -- but not how it ends.