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• on When a computer genius deciphers a deep space alien message and discovers that our entire existence is not what it seems, he must race to save our Universe from impending destruction.

  I want to delete my logline please but can't. I will post it again after I make some changes. Thanks. No need for more comments. :-)

• on When a series of murders with obscure motives stain with blood a small kingdom just after the abolition of the capital punishment, the police ends up suspecting the former last executioner to work on his own …

  Even funnier if they didn't.

• on When two people who admire each other from afar cross paths, they let the opportunity of a lifetime to meet pass them by.

  You've given away the end. Maybe you can make it more interesting... When two lost strangers paths cross, they make hard decisions that shape the rest of their lives. Or somehow include why they didn't meet.... but don't give away…

• on When a computer genius deciphers a deep space alien message and discovers that our entire existence is not what it seems, he must race to save our Universe from impending destruction.

  He has to race to get a message back to the Aliens and save the world. He is a IT genius and has uncovered this message in a computer program he invented. He has no special skills other than being…

• on When a computer genius deciphers a deep space alien message and discovers that our entire existence is not what it seems, he must race to save our Universe from impending destruction.

  The aliens are going to destroy Earth, as the message he discovers tell him.

• on When a series of murders with obscure motives stain with blood a small kingdom just after the abolition of the capital punishment, the police ends up suspecting the former last executioner to work on his own …

  I love this as a comedy! An unemployed executioner must stay one step ahead of the idiot police chief to continue his passionate work as a killer. I am just using my imagination and can see this being really funny!

• on A shy young girl wants to tell the real cause of her a friend's death because she was always bothered by her in her dreams but she is afraid that she might be accused of being a part of the crime and so she started to stalk her suspected killer only to realize that the death was self inflicted.

  It is really wordy. If it is not vital to the story you don't need it in the log line. A shy girl risks her own innocence by stalking her best friend's killer only to discover a horrifying truth.

• on In the near future, the world is falling apart. A disillusioned highway cop turns vigilante when his young family are slaughtered by a motor cycle gang who refuses to recognise the law.

  Make sure to use correct grammar and spelling when you actually submit this to anyone. (I assume you meant "cop" and "vigilante" also young family IS slaughtered) You could leave out that first sentence, and incorporate it into the second.…