A player afraid of commitments must save the girl he love when she gets kidnapped by one of his other girlfriends

A player afraid of commitments must save the girl he love when she gets kidnapped by one of his other girlfriends.

This is just my take but what I see are young adults on the streets of La..or any city..beating the odds but the past..one of his ex's..see's that he's happy and doesn't like it..so she kidnaps her in a revenge type play. Of course he saves her..and in the end they leave the city having survived it.

It's compelling and def. relates to people everywhere..love can survive all..BoyzintheHood kind of feel.

An ex gang member in hiding must save the girl he loves when she gets kidnapped by his ex girlfriend for gang initiation.

Don't anybody yell at me, I'm just giving other ways to go..or possibly another story he/she can write.

What's at stake? What are the kidnapper's demands? What is the ultimate jeopardy to the girl he loves?

I'm just wondering what you mean by player. I think you mean that he's a womanizer, but as it stands it could also mean he's a professional athlete. I would find a more specific way of describing who this protagonist exactly is. Beyond that, I think the logline is just fine.

Best of luck developing it!