A group of criminals see their escape from prison when an infamous prison breaker arrive. The problem however : he doesn’t want to escape anymore.

by Nbz Penpusher · 266 pts 1,167 views

7 reviews

Richiev Singularity · 82,714 pts ★ Accepted

I would give the lead character?an understandable reason to be desperate to escape from prison. Something that will make the audience like him and hope he succeeds. How about this:
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"When an infamous prisoner (Known for breaking out of any prison) is transferred to his cell block; a convict desperate to see his dying wife sees his chance to escape, but problems arise when he discovers the notorious criminal no longer desires escape."
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Fma Samurai · 1,607 pts

When?the most infamous prison escape artist?in America?arrives at? Denver Supermax,?a young group of lifers must convince him?to?break them out but he's?perfectly?content being the prison celebrity

CraigDGriffiths Singularity · 20,463 pts

I read this and thought "hangover" in prison. ?Just tidy up the English.

Does there have to be a main character? ?Yes and no. ?But this is selling the story not telling the story.

You could start withe the desire (goal) and the obstacle.

Three prison see a chance to escape when the greatest escapee of all time is sent to their prison. ?They have to convince him to escape when all he wants to do is serve his time.