A couple race against time to track down a high school student who murdered their daughter.

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3 reviews

The_CNI Samurai · 1,187 pts

Check out "formula" section for learning the correct Logline formula, because this doesn't fit the structure at all.

There's other unanswered questions here. I know they use the police, but couldn't you find some way to make them more active? It sounds like they will just have the police do the work for them.

And I second what Odie said, why them? Why do they have to race against time?

IvyEight6 Penpusher · 54 pts

The parents have to get the police to track her down.

Odie Samurai · 2,208 pts

I’m missing the "why them" to save the day and not the police and why the parents of this murdered teen have to race against time - are they next?

Keep going.