A bored accountant, disenchanted with life, thinks she?ll get a break on the ski slopes. Until she gets into a ski accident with a famous actor, who will do anything, including inventing a fake relationship, and turning her world upside down, to stay on top

Run Cinderella, Run (working title)

6 reviews

dpg Singularity · 112,231 pts

The logline seems to switch protagonists. First the focus is on the accountant. Then the focus switches to the actor. Who is the protagonist? Whose story line provides the unity of action to drive the plot?

If the accountant is the protagonist, then "get a break" is too vague to constitute an objective goal. Get a break for what? If the accountant is the protagonist, what is her specific objective goal?

Ditto if the actor is the protagonist: "fake a relationship" for what specific objective goal? "Stay on top " is a general goal, but loglines are about a specific, urgent objective goal.

What are the stakes in their relationship? That is, Who stands to win what if the protagonist (whoever he/she is) achieves his/her objective goal (whatever it is)? Who stands to lose what if he/she fails?

paul graunke 0 pts

The logline switches focus as to who is the protagonist and what is the principal story line. It starts out about a bored accountant. Then it switches focus to a famous actor.

Who is the protagonist? Whose dramatic struggle provides the unity of action that drives the story, the accountant's or the actor's?

SLClibra 0 pts

@ Vania - The short answer is the ski accident is essential because the inspiration behind this is the Sundance Film Festival, which is smack dab in the center of ski season. And the film festival atmosphere is integral to the plot for a number of reasons