Year 2000 hopefuls are bystanders as life throws cruel blow that will determine their once thought perfect futures.

2 reviews

Sophie Vasic Penpusher · 29 pts

Maybe be more specific as to what the event is, and start the logline with 'When' as well. Sure it will be a good story to read.

Lucas McDowall Penpusher · 26 pts

I love the premise but maybe try flipping the placements of some of the points, possibly:

'When life throws him a curveball, the 2000's hopeful must determine how to counter the cruel blow to save his perfect future'

In saying that, I am unclear of what his perfect future is, nor do I know what the cruel blow is.