Sophie Vasic
Penpusher · 29 points
- 1 logline
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Maybe be more specific as to what the event is, and start the logline with 'When' as well. Sure it will be a good story to read.
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Really interested to see the story play out between the confrontation between her and her family. Maybe be specific to which family members have come back? But overall really excited to read the story.
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Maybe add what started the violence or what the violent act was, as a specific event instead of just stating that he is confronted with violence in his new home. Besides that I really like the story! Really interesting on…