5 reviews
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I agree 100% with what FFF said and the logline that he suggested is really good.
Hello,
you can improuve you're logline beeing more specific. "Two men" is absolutely vague... what men? This is an important detail to define the story.
Make clear who is the main character, the running prankers or the detective? You have to choose and write the logline from his point of view.
Make it one sentence.
And, very very important, never say things like "unravelling the truth behind a remarkably twisted story". This is very unprofessional, believe me :) A logline tells the story. It's not a recipe for the story ('there will be compelling characters, unbearable suspence and a shocking unforgettable?ending').
One last thing,
the idea of a prank that collide with a real murder is interesting, but i feel like it's the first 15 minutes of the movie, then we have a classic "i'm innocent, find the real murderer" movie- there's nothing wrong with this structure but I would appreciate if the "prank" theme is stressed and take over?the whole movie, because this is what is strong in your idea. Something like "when two prankers are framed for murder they must use their prank genius to con the police while looking for the true murderes".