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• on When a harmless prank and a mystifying homicide collide, two men decide to run from the police to figure out who set them up. Their camaraderie shatters when one ends up in jail and the other one suddenly has a flawless alibi. A relentless detective keeps unravelling the truth behind a remarkably twisted story that keeps on washing up new suspects at every turn.

  I agree 100% with what FFF said and the logline that he suggested is really good.  

• on When a conservative man adjusts to life in a wheelchair, he suddenly finds it difficult to achieve an erection. Snubbed by his busy, self-centered wife, and desperate to reclaim his virility, he must use something he hasn?t in years: porn. (Short Film) ★ Accepted

  I don't find this to be interesting or unique. ?It's a guy on a wheelchair watching porn. Have you seen the film "The Sessions" about a 38 year's old man in an iron lung who decides that he doesn't want…

• on After his father dies under mysterious circumstances, a young man gets tangled up in an undercover operation against London’s most notorious crime family.

  I've been thinking about this logline. Like I said before I don't think this is interesting enough or even much unique. So I'd suggest something like this: "A young man goes undercover and infiltrates London's most notorious crime family to…

• on A brilliant but daring high school senior creates a multi-million dollar video game by stealing the concept from a big-time CEO.

  I know that a lot of people won't agree with me on what I'm about to say, but for me a logline has to say what the movie is about and make people interested enough to watch the movie and…

• on An ambitious woman takes over her uncle?s struggling restaurant, determined to bring the business back to life. When the staff that don?t meet Wendy?s standards begin to disappear, the remaining employees start to question just how dedicated to her job their new manager might be. You?d better hope you?re on next week?s roster.

  What if Wendy was not the killer and she had to figure out who is killing her staff and prove to the police that she's innocent? Then you would have mystery.

• on When a young girl wakes up in the forest, struggling to remember what brought her there and made her pass out, a friend appears to help her get back home.

  When I read the logline I immediately figured out that her friend was behind of what happened to her. dpg guessed it to. So if that's your twist then it's not a very good one. I also don't think the…

• on When a midnight-show radio host receives an anonymous hint about a mysterious murder, he sets out to find the real killer and needs to convince the police they’re after the wrong person.

  There is a book with a similar concept. Here's the logline of "Intent To Kill" By James?Grippando: Ryan James, a former minor-league baseball player turned sports radio host, receives an anonymous tip about the unsolved hit-and-run accident that killed his…

• on After his father dies under mysterious circumstances, a young man gets tangled up in an undercover operation against London’s most notorious crime family.

  This would be a movie that I would watch if it had at least one actor that I like. ?The concept is not original enough to make me interested just by reading the logline.

• on When two young lovers get a motorboat and escape on a romantic weekend adventure, a fatal mistake leaves them stranded on a dark island outside of Stockholm for at least the night.

  A couple spends a night on some island. Is that it? This doesn't sound very interesting. There has to be something dangerous and scary on that Island and that should be in the logline.

• on Two young men with opposite lives from opposite sides of the world unwittingly exchange destinies as one encounters the other, and the other encounters a vision of God.

  My problem with this logline is that I don't understand what do you mean with "exchange destinies". For me you need to explain that a little better. Like it is this logline doesn't make me interested to know the full…

• on A brilliant but daring high school senior creates a multi-million dollar video game by stealing the concept from a big-time CEO.

  I'm a programmer so this is something very interesting to me. I like the concept. It's something that I'd be interested to watch.

• on In order to take care of her recently orphaned younger sister, a broke twentysomething decides to sleep around with married men with the intention of blackmailing them, lest she expose them for their infidelity.

  I like the idea. It's an interesting concept. I agree with Paul Clarke about the last line to be unnecessary. But I actually think that the idea of her doing it to several men is more interesting. It evolves more…