When told that the fate of the insane is worse than that of a normal prisoner, a murderer who plans to pretend to be insane must attempt to make the court consider him a sane murderer.

3 reviews

PeterK Penpusher · 26 pts

Good that you changed the word amount and it seems better now.
It looks like a great story and can't wait to see what you do with it.

Peter K.

Joshua L. Penpusher · 28 pts

You do have a point, 36 words is probably a bit much.

How does this sound?:
When told the fate of an insane prisoner is worse than normal, a deceptive murderer must get the court to reconsider him sane.

MartyDawes Penpusher · 29 pts

it's a bit wordy - Any way to simplify it?