PeterK

Recent reviews

• on When a car swerves into a telephone pole, a young girl rushes to help the injured driver; but when the driver takes her hostage as police arrive, she must find a way to escape her captor.

  You hooked me in the beginning, can't wait to see what happens.

• on A young boy who has ADD and social awkwardness, meets a coach for a basketball team who decides to train the boy into focusing his disabilities into sport and make him a champion.

  I agree with Ben. Use this formula, When (an event happens) a(n) (main character) must (do the action). But otherwise it looks like a great story and can't wait to see where you go with it. Peter K.

• on When told that the fate of the insane is worse than that of a normal prisoner, a murderer who plans to pretend to be insane must attempt to make the court consider him a sane murderer.

  Good that you changed the word amount and it seems better now. It looks like a great story and can't wait to see what you do with it. Peter K.

• on When a small teenager who wears an alien mask gets bullied and called a freak, the teenager must learn to hide from society to avoid getting bullied.

  Thanks for the feedback. How does this sound? When a small male teenager gets bullied and called a freak by bullies, the teenager must learn to stay invisible from the bullies to avoid getting hurt. Here is the synopsis: Frank…