When an innocent female assassin is framed for the murder of her partner, she must evade the utopian society she protects long enough to convince an unbelieving man from a rival family to take over his rightful place as leader of the community, a feat that places her and the realm she protects at risk.

The Call of Arthur Lark

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Leon Davis Samurai · 958 pts

How can she be an "innocent female assassin?"

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When an assassin is framed for the murder of her partner, she risks the utopian society she protects to convince an unbelieving man from a rival family to take his rightful place as leader of the community, a feat that places her and the realm in jeopardy.

dpg Singularity · 112,231 pts

It's not clear what the causal relationship is; that is, how being framed for murder jeopardizes of the utopian community. Or why being framed compels her to nag the guy into acting like a mensch.

Also the plot seems to pivot on the guy, not the girl. She can only try to influence him; she can't MAKE him do what he needs to do. The biggest decision is his to make -- not hers. So who is the protagonist? And who is the antagonist, the common foe?

Former member Penpusher · 20 pts

'innocent' and 'framed' are redundant ... as are 'convince' and 'unbelieving' ... as is 'over' and 'rightful'.
She has to evade the whole society? Seems a bit odd. As written achieving her goal puts her and the realm at risk. Seems like an unworthy goal. So maybe 'feat' is the wrong word.