When a young girl with special brain abilities finally escapes her prison, she?s seen as a weapon of mass destruction by both sides of a rebellion ? but she?s just searching for peace.

5 reviews

variable Summitry · 18,541 pts

"a young renegade prisoner with unusual mental powers tries to live a normal life,
only to find herself at the center of a rebellion
with both the sides seeking to use her as weapon of mass destruction"

Neer Shelter Singularity · 55,464 pts

Agreed with all the above comments.

Also, what starts her off on her journey? What is her inciting incident? Could it be that something happened that motivated her to finally escape? Her escaping prison is of her own doing and no surprise, so it could hardly fulfill the function of an inciting incident. If you give her a reason why she has to escape now then that could wok well as a motivating event.

chris34cb Penpusher · 151 pts

This sounds like the plot of a super hero movie so needs some clarity if it's anything else