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Yep, the Demon thing seems out of place unless you mention this professor is an expert in demonic practices so we have the setup.
I would cut who they team up with for simplicity and just focus that their works have been stolen and about to be used to end the planet as we know it.
The demon thing kinda comes out of nowhere
Agree with CraigDGriffiths.
And in the original version it's not clear what the cause-and-effect relationship between the stolen academic work and the unleashing of the demon.? What is there about the academic work that can enable someone to unleash a demon?